2022-08-29 20:08:03
IELTS WRITING: LESS IS MORE
Сегодня покажу апгрейд целых параграфов, когда более короткие версии развивают аргумент лучше.
Навык писать лаконично нужен для семерки, когда в 3-4 предложения нужно «present - extend - support the idea».
При сокращении все идеи авторов остались на месте + я добавила примеры и детали для развития идеи вглубь:
A complete ban on all forms of advertising is unacceptable as there is such a useful type of commercial as social advertisement. Unlike usual commercials, social advertising focuses on acute social problems and shows people the dire consequences of these problems through a variety of forms of media, be it videos, posters or short films with illustrative examples. As a result of this, many people begin to pay attention to the social issues and help solve them, starting with themselves, for example, by getting rid of bad habits such as smoking.
On the other hand, social advertising should remain as it is to attract attention to acute social problems. Being shown concequences of irresponsible behaviors or addictions in media, people are more likely to address them. For example, seeing scary pictures with health effects of smoking on banners or TV may help break this habit.
The reason why advertisements should be forbidden is that they encourage people to make impulse spendings. A lot of companies hire marketers who design their advertising in a way that manipulate the human psyche by C, catchy sloganS or limited offer’s time. As a result, people purchase goods they do not need, placing a strain on family budget. For instance, some tv ads claim that next several minutes are the last chance to purchase a product with 50% discount, making people immediately buy it, not living audience a chance to think whether they need that jewelry or knife set or not.
Aadvertisements should be forbidden because they encourage impulsive spending by manipulating consumers' psyche. Being lured by catchy slogans or limited offer’s time to purchase a product with 50% discount, people may buy goods they do not need or cannot afford, be it another knife set or jewelry.
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